Don’t fuck

21st June 2009

not picking up anything
circling and not picking up anything
why is it that whenever there’s a word
that word is to give to you
as if I weren’t enough for flowers
now you have to have my buds

5 responses

  1. ryan manning comments:

    yes

  2. mariana comments:

    because when you mention something with a word it makes you feel that its like your own

  3. Ani Smith comments:

    Ryan: *wink*

    Mariana: Million dollars! Mad writing skillz! Hot chicks! Ummmm … Enlightenment! Hmmm. Doesn’t seem to be working for me.

  4. Jim Murdoch comments:

    This reads well. It feels good to read. I’m side stepping the whole ‘meaning’ thing because I’m sure one could impose a variety of meanings on it. The point I’m trying to make is that because it’s the kind of poem one is happy to read over and over again - Christ, I must have read it twenty times already - then one is more likely to try and impose a sense of sense on it rather than simply shrugging and pass on by. That said I’m not crazy on the title (assuming that is the poem’s title). I think it could be more helpful.

  5. Ani Smith comments:

    Thanks, Jim. I have no idea what the title and the first two lines mean. I’ve been trying to remember what I was on about, but this was written a few weeks ago late at night.

    Not that I would tell you what it was, even if I could remember. ;)

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