Comments on: Trudl machinates http://downinme.com/2009/05/21/trudl-machinates/ “bad writing is characterized by obfuscation, showboating, narcissism, lack of a moral core, and style over substance." Thu, 09 Sep 2010 09:35:11 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.1 By: mariana http://downinme.com/2009/05/21/trudl-machinates/comment-page-1/#comment-4036 mariana Tue, 26 May 2009 19:42:40 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=1480#comment-4036 You are right Ani, it is probably just me, I guess I should start speaking to people and showering again. You are right Ani, it is probably just me, I guess I should start speaking to people and showering again.

]]> By: Ani Smith http://downinme.com/2009/05/21/trudl-machinates/comment-page-1/#comment-4035 Ani Smith Mon, 25 May 2009 14:29:54 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=1480#comment-4035 Mariana: Really? All people around me ever seem to do is have sex with each other. Chris: Seems you weren't the only one to read it that way. Roberta: I love Dan Rhodes. Damn. Another one of those thinly-veiled influences? (The name came from something else directly though - but not from Lidl, ha.) AUW: Apparently no one likes cock any more since the invention of fake plastic cock. Mariana: Really? All people around me ever seem to do is have sex with each other.

Chris: Seems you weren’t the only one to read it that way.

Roberta: I love Dan Rhodes. Damn. Another one of those thinly-veiled influences? (The name came from something else directly though - but not from Lidl, ha.)

AUW: Apparently no one likes cock any more since the invention of fake plastic cock.

]]> By: An Unreliable Witness http://downinme.com/2009/05/21/trudl-machinates/comment-page-1/#comment-4034 An Unreliable Witness Sun, 24 May 2009 17:43:28 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=1480#comment-4034 I didn't read clock as cock. I read it as chicken. And we all know what 'choking the chicken' is a metaphor for, don't we? I didn’t read clock as cock. I read it as chicken. And we all know what ‘choking the chicken’ is a metaphor for, don’t we?

]]> By: Roberta http://downinme.com/2009/05/21/trudl-machinates/comment-page-1/#comment-4033 Roberta Sun, 24 May 2009 11:25:40 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=1480#comment-4033 i read 'clock' as 'cock' too. 'trudl' made me think of 'lidl.' there's that dan rhodes story with the character called grendl, or some other similar fairytale styled name. more names should end with an 'l.' the sky blue vibration was definitely pretty. i read ‘clock’ as ‘cock’ too.

‘trudl’ made me think of ‘lidl.’

there’s that dan rhodes story with the character called grendl, or some other similar fairytale styled name. more names should end with an ‘l.’

the sky blue vibration was definitely pretty.

]]> By: chris http://downinme.com/2009/05/21/trudl-machinates/comment-page-1/#comment-4032 chris Sat, 23 May 2009 20:48:28 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=1480#comment-4032 I've read this about 4 times and every time through read 'clock' as cock. Is that stating the obvious? Yah, about 4 times. Maybe 3. Seems like 4. I’ve read this about 4 times and every time through read ‘clock’ as cock. Is that stating the obvious?

Yah, about 4 times. Maybe 3. Seems like 4.

]]> By: mariana http://downinme.com/2009/05/21/trudl-machinates/comment-page-1/#comment-4031 mariana Sat, 23 May 2009 03:57:16 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=1480#comment-4031 Not even people don't have sex anymore (too much time an effort), now they do not evey use their hands anymore (still some effort), therefore the bunny gets elected (practically effort-free). Not even people don’t have sex anymore (too much time an effort), now they do not evey use their hands anymore (still some effort), therefore the bunny gets elected (practically effort-free).

]]> By: Ani Smith http://downinme.com/2009/05/21/trudl-machinates/comment-page-1/#comment-4030 Ani Smith Fri, 22 May 2009 21:38:14 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=1480#comment-4030 xtx: http://en.lelo.com/index.php?collectionName=femme&groupName=IRIS Jim: You mean after all that you still don't get me? Ah, Jim. Jimmy Jim Jim. :) Okay, I'll humour you: The juxtaposition of once and never The repetition The story-ness of the word 'once' That she never owned a clock once, but she may do so now since 'there's simply no time' That it sounds good to my ear That not many people talk/write that way Shall I keep embarrassing myself? xtx: http://en.lelo.com/index.php?collectionName=femme&groupName=IRIS

Jim: You mean after all that you still don’t get me? Ah, Jim. Jimmy Jim Jim. :)

Okay, I’ll humour you:

The juxtaposition of once and never
The repetition
The story-ness of the word ‘once’
That she never owned a clock once, but she may do so now since ‘there’s simply no time’
That it sounds good to my ear
That not many people talk/write that way

Shall I keep embarrassing myself?

]]> By: Jim Murdoch http://downinme.com/2009/05/21/trudl-machinates/comment-page-1/#comment-4029 Jim Murdoch Fri, 22 May 2009 03:15:00 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=1480#comment-4029 I am curious about the last sentence. Why not simply: 'Trudl never owned a clock'? Why the 'Once'? I am curious about the last sentence. Why not simply: ‘Trudl never owned a clock’? Why the ‘Once’?

]]> By: xtx http://downinme.com/2009/05/21/trudl-machinates/comment-page-1/#comment-4028 xtx Thu, 21 May 2009 22:34:27 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=1480#comment-4028 go trudi. my rabbit is getting boring any suggestions? go trudi.
my rabbit is getting boring
any suggestions?

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