Comments on: But I am someone else http://downinme.com/2008/09/25/but-i-am-someone-else/ “bad writing is characterized by obfuscation, showboating, narcissism, lack of a moral core, and style over substance." Fri, 11 May 2012 00:46:50 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.4 By: Deity http://downinme.com/2008/09/25/but-i-am-someone-else/comment-page-1/#comment-2075 Deity Tue, 30 Sep 2008 15:00:56 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=420#comment-2075 I'm curious, but are you sure (and this is only my perspective) you don't want to disappear, if even for a moment? I’m curious, but are you sure (and this is only my perspective) you don’t want to disappear, if even for a moment?

]]> By: Ani Smith http://downinme.com/2008/09/25/but-i-am-someone-else/comment-page-1/#comment-2072 Ani Smith Sun, 28 Sep 2008 15:20:11 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=420#comment-2072 Shell: I know what you mean, Shell. And sometimes, there's someone who grounds you and without whom you could easily float away on the steam of your own refuse. ;) [And thank you.] Jim: Cheers, Jim. I wouldn't have said 'fuckers' because I unequivocally meant 'lovers'. Also, I said 'crushed' because the speaker is very much an active participant, and very much the main instigator. Maybe for a more accurate physical picture I should have said 'crushed between my thighs', but that's a bit of a cliché, isn't it? I wanted to be explicit and the word 'labia' is embarrassing to me, so I wanted to use it. You're right, writing about sex is hard (pun intended?) That's why I never write only about sex. Usually when I refer to sex I'm writing about something else entirely. Usually. Shell: I know what you mean, Shell. And sometimes, there’s someone who grounds you and without whom you could easily float away on the steam of your own refuse. ;) [And thank you.]

Jim: Cheers, Jim. I wouldn’t have said ‘fuckers’ because I unequivocally meant ‘lovers’. Also, I said ‘crushed’ because the speaker is very much an active participant, and very much the main instigator.

Maybe for a more accurate physical picture I should have said ‘crushed between my thighs’, but that’s a bit of a cliché, isn’t it? I wanted to be explicit and the word ‘labia’ is embarrassing to me, so I wanted to use it.

You’re right, writing about sex is hard (pun intended?) That’s why I never write only about sex. Usually when I refer to sex I’m writing about something else entirely. Usually.

]]> By: Jim Murdoch http://downinme.com/2008/09/25/but-i-am-someone-else/comment-page-1/#comment-2071 Jim Murdoch Sun, 28 Sep 2008 11:42:36 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=420#comment-2071 A couple of words jumped out at me here - 'lonely lovers' (try 'lonely fuckers') and 'crushed between' ('crammed' feels better since the labia here is not the active party but the receptive one; in another context I'd argue the other way). Actually I'm not sure I like 'crammed' that much either but it's your poem, not mine. Writing about sex is hard. I steer clear of it for the most part but you do a good job here and I agree that 'Please don't let me / disappear' is a great couple of lines. A couple of words jumped out at me here - ‘lonely lovers’ (try ‘lonely fuckers’) and ‘crushed between’ (‘crammed’ feels better since the labia here is not the active party but the receptive one; in another context I’d argue the other way). Actually I’m not sure I like ‘crammed’ that much either but it’s your poem, not mine.

Writing about sex is hard. I steer clear of it for the most part but you do a good job here and I agree that ‘Please don’t let me / disappear’ is a great couple of lines.

]]> By: Shell http://downinme.com/2008/09/25/but-i-am-someone-else/comment-page-1/#comment-2069 Shell Sun, 28 Sep 2008 11:01:18 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=420#comment-2069 desperately wonderful ... (i'm in ridiculously succinct mood today *grin) sometimes there isn't anything that "proves" i'm still here, wherever that is ... and mostly it's free-er to be disembodied anyway! *shudders at past-vampires who made meals of my thoughts ... desperately wonderful …

(i’m in ridiculously succinct mood today *grin)

sometimes there isn’t anything that “proves” i’m still here, wherever that is … and mostly it’s free-er to be disembodied anyway! *shudders at past-vampires who made meals of my thoughts …

]]> By: Ani Smith http://downinme.com/2008/09/25/but-i-am-someone-else/comment-page-1/#comment-2065 Ani Smith Sat, 27 Sep 2008 21:46:15 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=420#comment-2065 Thehappymisfit: You can't disappear, not really. I would kiss you, if I could. And then you'd know, sweetheart. Paul: If you didn't before, you probably won't start now. ;) AUW: I would give my right leg for some jerk chicken. Oh, and also ... *blush* Thehappymisfit: You can’t disappear, not really. I would kiss you, if I could. And then you’d know, sweetheart.

Paul: If you didn’t before, you probably won’t start now. ;)

AUW: I would give my right leg for some jerk chicken. Oh, and also … *blush*

]]> By: An Unreliable Witness http://downinme.com/2008/09/25/but-i-am-someone-else/comment-page-1/#comment-2063 An Unreliable Witness Sat, 27 Sep 2008 07:22:45 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=420#comment-2063 just to mix my metaphors a moment, I would give my right leg to have the sort of headache that causes stunted creativity, if this is the end result . . . just to mix my metaphors a moment, I would give my right leg to have the sort of headache that causes stunted creativity, if this is the end result . . .

]]> By: Paul http://downinme.com/2008/09/25/but-i-am-someone-else/comment-page-1/#comment-2057 Paul Fri, 26 Sep 2008 01:05:16 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=420#comment-2057 I'm not sure. Let me sleep on it. I’m not sure. Let me sleep on it.

]]> By: thehappymisfit http://downinme.com/2008/09/25/but-i-am-someone-else/comment-page-1/#comment-2056 thehappymisfit Thu, 25 Sep 2008 18:47:56 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=420#comment-2056 Oh fuck Ani..."please don't let me disappear" i love this, and you and everything you write. now if i could just stop crying.... :) Oh fuck Ani…”please don’t let me disappear” i love this, and you and everything you write. now if i could just stop crying…. :)

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