Comments on: The horse’s head is meaty and none but fools do eat it http://downinme.com/2008/08/24/the-horses-head-is-meaty-and-none-but-fools-do-eat-it/ “bad writing is characterized by obfuscation, showboating, narcissism, lack of a moral core, and style over substance." Fri, 11 May 2012 00:46:50 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.4 By: Ani http://downinme.com/2008/08/24/the-horses-head-is-meaty-and-none-but-fools-do-eat-it/comment-page-1/#comment-1965 Ani Sun, 31 Aug 2008 14:26:59 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=313#comment-1965 Your Wandering Mind: Good, I'm glad you did, this is entertainment, after all. Jim Murdoch: Heheh. You are no such thing. With no other clues to go on, it would be near impossible (Mr Unreliable Show Off there is aware that I can quote some of Romeo's parts so he had somewhat of a head start). AUW: You big show off. :P Lore: Your tea towel is in the mail! [Mind you, now I can't help but feel like a Shakespeare-referencing, pretentious twat.] Your Wandering Mind: Good, I’m glad you did, this is entertainment, after all.

Jim Murdoch: Heheh. You are no such thing. With no other clues to go on, it would be near impossible (Mr Unreliable Show Off there is aware that I can quote some of Romeo’s parts so he had somewhat of a head start).

AUW: You big show off. :P

Lore: Your tea towel is in the mail!

[Mind you, now I can’t help but feel like a Shakespeare-referencing, pretentious twat.]

]]> By: Lore http://downinme.com/2008/08/24/the-horses-head-is-meaty-and-none-but-fools-do-eat-it/comment-page-1/#comment-1964 Lore Sun, 31 Aug 2008 13:10:23 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=313#comment-1964 "Her vestal livery is but sick and green And none but fools do wear it." I needed AUW to get it, and I'm not even sure it's the right one. William S., Romeo & Juliet – anyway. “Her vestal livery is but sick and green
And none but fools do wear it.”

I needed AUW to get it, and I’m not even sure it’s the right one. William S., Romeo & Juliet – anyway.

]]> By: An Unreliable Witness http://downinme.com/2008/08/24/the-horses-head-is-meaty-and-none-but-fools-do-eat-it/comment-page-1/#comment-1962 An Unreliable Witness Sun, 31 Aug 2008 08:54:03 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=313#comment-1962 Just to put Jim out of his misery - I believe it's said by Romeo in Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet. By Shakespeare; William Shakespeare. The guy with the moustache and the camp hair. Do I win a prize? I would like one of those exclusive Down In Me tea-towels, please. Just to put Jim out of his misery - I believe it’s said by Romeo in Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet. By Shakespeare; William Shakespeare. The guy with the moustache and the camp hair.

Do I win a prize? I would like one of those exclusive Down In Me tea-towels, please.

]]> By: Jim Murdoch http://downinme.com/2008/08/24/the-horses-head-is-meaty-and-none-but-fools-do-eat-it/comment-page-1/#comment-1959 Jim Murdoch Sat, 30 Aug 2008 11:45:56 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=313#comment-1959 I'm such a disappointment I know. So where's it from? I’m such a disappointment I know. So where’s it from?

]]> By: Your Wandering Mind http://downinme.com/2008/08/24/the-horses-head-is-meaty-and-none-but-fools-do-eat-it/comment-page-1/#comment-1956 Your Wandering Mind Fri, 29 Aug 2008 03:11:32 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=313#comment-1956 Brilliant! I enjoyed it all, including the last last part. Brilliant! I enjoyed it all, including the last last part.

]]> By: Ani http://downinme.com/2008/08/24/the-horses-head-is-meaty-and-none-but-fools-do-eat-it/comment-page-1/#comment-1954 Ani Wed, 27 Aug 2008 18:10:13 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=313#comment-1954 Zinzy: Hello and welcome.. and thank you kindly. Clarissa: In that case, please give me 50 quid - no, a hundred. Now. Thank you. AUW: Bet you say that to all the girls. Drodbar: If you really think it'll help? Jim: I've never been to Sedona, but the name is significant all the same. Where I used to live in the states, trailer parks and ghettos were right up cozy next to the more affluent areas. I think it's something to do with giving the appearance of equality. You can imagine it has exactly the opposite effect. These girls aren't trailer trash, though, that's too obvious. It seems a cat is narrating the story. Or something. ;) I confess, I half expected you to get the reference in the title, though... Zinzy: Hello and welcome.. and thank you kindly.

Clarissa: In that case, please give me 50 quid - no, a hundred. Now. Thank you.

AUW: Bet you say that to all the girls.

Drodbar: If you really think it’ll help?

Jim: I’ve never been to Sedona, but the name is significant all the same. Where I used to live in the states, trailer parks and ghettos were right up cozy next to the more affluent areas. I think it’s something to do with giving the appearance of equality. You can imagine it has exactly the opposite effect. These girls aren’t trailer trash, though, that’s too obvious. It seems a cat is narrating the story. Or something. ;)

I confess, I half expected you to get the reference in the title, though…

]]> By: Jim Murdoch http://downinme.com/2008/08/24/the-horses-head-is-meaty-and-none-but-fools-do-eat-it/comment-page-1/#comment-1953 Jim Murdoch Tue, 26 Aug 2008 11:41:57 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=313#comment-1953 For the record I did your opening paragraph last. I tend to cut and paste works I want to read carefully in Microsoft Word so that I can adjust the font and spacing to suit my failing eyesight. This is really a sweet-and-sour piece, isn't it? I am curious what you hoped to gain by asking your readers to exercise a modicum of self-control at the start. I'm tempted to think this is to place them in a similar position to the narrator of the piece with the object of her … desire I suspect is too strong a word … curiosity so close. I do understand what the narrator is on about when looking at her sister. I felt something similar about mine: if I was a girl, I'd look like you; I believe that was the day, sitting on a bus in East Kilbride, that I realised we both took after our mother. What is interesting is that I feel this piece is being directed toward the males in the audience, or am I reading 'Put that thing away' wrong? It is an 'entertainment' but one where you pull your punches. The use of 'motor home' in the epilogue caught me off guard and changed my impression of these girls; suddenly I'm thinking "poor white trash" and I'm a bit out of my depth. My wife tells me that Sedona is a nice enough place to live, certainly not what she'd associate with trailer-trash-country but I have no idea. This first/last paragraph is a great rant. It's very much a before-and-after, isn't it? For the record I did your opening paragraph last. I tend to cut and paste works I want to read carefully in Microsoft Word so that I can adjust the font and spacing to suit my failing eyesight.

This is really a sweet-and-sour piece, isn’t it? I am curious what you hoped to gain by asking your readers to exercise a modicum of self-control at the start. I’m tempted to think this is to place them in a similar position to the narrator of the piece with the object of her … desire I suspect is too strong a word … curiosity so close.

I do understand what the narrator is on about when looking at her sister. I felt something similar about mine: if I was a girl, I’d look like you; I believe that was the day, sitting on a bus in East Kilbride, that I realised we both took after our mother.

What is interesting is that I feel this piece is being directed toward the males in the audience, or am I reading ‘Put that thing away’ wrong? It is an ‘entertainment’ but one where you pull your punches.

The use of ‘motor home’ in the epilogue caught me off guard and changed my impression of these girls; suddenly I’m thinking “poor white trash” and I’m a bit out of my depth.

My wife tells me that Sedona is a nice enough place to live, certainly not what she’d associate with trailer-trash-country but I have no idea. This first/last paragraph is a great rant. It’s very much a before-and-after, isn’t it?

]]> By: drodbar http://downinme.com/2008/08/24/the-horses-head-is-meaty-and-none-but-fools-do-eat-it/comment-page-1/#comment-1952 drodbar Tue, 26 Aug 2008 11:40:15 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=313#comment-1952 May I offer you a virtual malteser? May I offer you a virtual malteser?

]]> By: An Unreliable Witness http://downinme.com/2008/08/24/the-horses-head-is-meaty-and-none-but-fools-do-eat-it/comment-page-1/#comment-1951 An Unreliable Witness Tue, 26 Aug 2008 09:28:57 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=313#comment-1951 I must confess that, unlike Clarissa, I read this in the wrong order. Then I read it in the right order, as requested. Then I read it again. And parts of it again. Let's just say that I read it a lot ... I must confess that, unlike Clarissa, I read this in the wrong order. Then I read it in the right order, as requested. Then I read it again. And parts of it again. Let’s just say that I read it a lot …

]]> By: clarissa http://downinme.com/2008/08/24/the-horses-head-is-meaty-and-none-but-fools-do-eat-it/comment-page-1/#comment-1945 clarissa Mon, 25 Aug 2008 19:41:32 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=313#comment-1945 I read the last part (the part you put first) last because you told me do. I'm a compliant type of girl. I read the last part (the part you put first) last because you told me do. I’m a compliant type of girl.

]]> By: Zinzy http://downinme.com/2008/08/24/the-horses-head-is-meaty-and-none-but-fools-do-eat-it/comment-page-1/#comment-1944 Zinzy Mon, 25 Aug 2008 19:05:41 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=313#comment-1944 Hey Ani! I just read your "Notice" part - this is my first time here - and I already think you are awesome. Definitely keeping myself up to date with this blog :) Hey Ani!
I just read your “Notice” part - this is my first time here - and I already think you are awesome. Definitely keeping myself up to date with this blog :)

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