Comments on: Forced to express a desire http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/ “bad writing is characterized by obfuscation, showboating, narcissism, lack of a moral core, and style over substance." Fri, 11 May 2012 00:46:50 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.4 By: Ani Smith http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-4825 Ani Smith Mon, 14 Dec 2009 18:38:09 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-4825 Hello Stumbleuponers, Glad you found this little piece. I'm not interested in grammar and usage wars or name-calling (unless we're in a dungeon and I'm calling you daddy) so I'm going to close this little box now, but if you're really feeling crazy you can click DOWN IN ME up at the top there and check out some more recent stuff to happily smear your opinion all over. Or you can whisper it right in my ear by <a href="mailto:mail@downinme.com" rel="nofollow">emailing me</a>. Love, Ani Hello Stumbleuponers,

Glad you found this little piece. I’m not interested in grammar and usage wars or name-calling (unless we’re in a dungeon and I’m calling you daddy) so I’m going to close this little box now, but if you’re really feeling crazy you can click DOWN IN ME up at the top there and check out some more recent stuff to happily smear your opinion all over. Or you can whisper it right in my ear by emailing me.

Love,
 Ani

]]> By: juice http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-4823 juice Mon, 14 Dec 2009 10:08:40 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-4823 That was directed at natasha who is a self righteous douche. Pardon my french. lol That was directed at natasha who is a self righteous douche. Pardon my french. lol

]]> By: juice http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-4822 juice Mon, 14 Dec 2009 10:07:21 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-4822 I believe you should have said analyze rather than analysis. The reason people focus on vocabulary, syntax, and all that jazz is because it is the proper way to communicate through the written word. People like you are why the english language is going to hell. I believe you should have said analyze rather than analysis. The reason people focus on vocabulary, syntax, and all that jazz is because it is the proper way to communicate through the written word. People like you are why the english language is going to hell.

]]> By: Natasha http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-4820 Natasha Sun, 13 Dec 2009 07:16:29 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-4820 Dear Vocabulary Nazi, This was not about vocabulary, syntax, parallelism, metaphors, and the thousands of words of figurative language techniques, which are only helpful on high school AP tests, and SATs. Unfortunately the world is full of people like you that take something pure, and innocent and analysis it to such an extent that it truly is worthless. I love this piece, not for the vocabulary, syntax, parallelism, or metaphors but because it is a plethora of feeling that adds to one of the most powerful emotions love. BEAUTIFUL Dear Vocabulary Nazi,

This was not about vocabulary, syntax, parallelism, metaphors, and the thousands of words of figurative language techniques, which are only helpful on high school AP tests, and SATs. Unfortunately the world is full of people like you that take something pure, and innocent and analysis it to such an extent that it truly is worthless.
I love this piece, not for the vocabulary, syntax, parallelism, or metaphors but because it is a plethora of feeling that adds to one of the most powerful emotions love.
 BEAUTIFUL

]]> By: Bruce http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-4749 Bruce Fri, 20 Nov 2009 04:57:50 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-4749 Erratic Static gets it. This is what the internet should be all about. A forum of open expression. No need to be callous or rude. I loved this poem. It was simple and true. Erratic Static gets it. This is what the internet should be all about. A forum of open expression. No need to be callous or rude. I loved this poem. It was simple and true.

]]> By: erratic static http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-4638 erratic static Sat, 03 Oct 2009 06:14:28 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-4638 ...pardon me, but was this actually supposed to be "critiqued"? I read it as simply someone writing because they needed to say something. …pardon me, but was this actually supposed to be “critiqued”? I read it as simply someone writing because they needed to say something.

]]> By: Chelsea http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-4605 Chelsea Thu, 24 Sep 2009 00:40:54 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-4605 I found this charmingly honest and real, in fact it hits very close to home. And I love it. That isn't to say I don't somewhat agree with "Jose," it is obviously amateur writing. "Masturbation in words..." implies it was written with purely selfish motives... and not meant for the rest of the world to fall in love with. Which is okay, perfectly fine. It is honest, and it touched me. Thank you for sharing. I found this charmingly honest and real, in fact it hits very close to home. And I love it.

That isn’t to say I don’t somewhat agree with “Jose,” it is obviously amateur writing. “Masturbation in words…” implies it was written with purely selfish motives… and not meant for the rest of the world to fall in love with. Which is okay, perfectly fine.

It is honest, and it touched me. Thank you for sharing.

]]> By: Jose http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-4598 Jose Tue, 22 Sep 2009 01:30:10 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-4598 Just because you use "dissipate", "reiterate", "existence" and "affirmative gesture" does not make this sentimental piece of trash good. This is masturbation in words. Read more. Write better. Stop this Nora Roberts trash. Just because you use “dissipate”, “reiterate”, “existence” and “affirmative gesture” does not make this sentimental piece of trash good. This is masturbation in words. Read more. Write better. Stop this Nora Roberts trash.

]]> By: Ian http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-4596 Ian Mon, 21 Sep 2009 15:40:23 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-4596 You're a kitty! You’re a kitty!

]]> By: DougTheBug http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-4586 DougTheBug Thu, 17 Sep 2009 00:29:44 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-4586 "I want... I need". Human's selfish flesh connections. It'll end. It'll end. “I want… I need”. Human’s selfish flesh connections. It’ll end. It’ll end.

]]> By: Cynthia http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-1896 Cynthia Sat, 02 Aug 2008 21:37:24 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-1896 Oh, yeahyeahyeah, you've described heaven in such gentle writing and honesty. Oh, yeahyeahyeah, you’ve described heaven in
such gentle writing and honesty.

]]> By: Ani http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-1881 Ani Thu, 31 Jul 2008 19:26:03 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-1881 Lissa: Thank you. :) Your Wandering Mind: Isn't everyone at times? AUW: Bit hot, don't you find? Jim Murdoch: The title comes from forcing oneself to admit such vulnerability. Not an easy thing to do, I find. I like your interpretation, too, though, of forcing the responses, so in that way, I'm glad it was open-ended. Z: Am not! Shush. ;) Lissa: Thank you. :)

Your Wandering Mind: Isn’t everyone at times?

AUW: Bit hot, don’t you find?

Jim Murdoch: The title comes from forcing oneself to admit such vulnerability. Not an easy thing to do, I find. I like your interpretation, too, though, of forcing the responses, so in that way, I’m glad it was open-ended.

Z: Am not! Shush. ;)

]]> By: Z http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-1880 Z Thu, 31 Jul 2008 18:06:30 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-1880 Aw! You sentimental thing :) Aw! You sentimental thing :)

]]> By: Jim Murdoch http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-1879 Jim Murdoch Thu, 31 Jul 2008 08:58:20 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-1879 This is a nice gentle piece but I have to ask about the title: Why forced? Nothing in this piece seems the slightest bit forced. And who is being forced? I suspect it's not the narrator. Is it that by placing herself in this situation - or should I say intending to place herself in this situation - she is hoping to force the responses she relates in the piece? This is a nice gentle piece but I have to ask about the title: Why forced? Nothing in this piece seems the slightest bit forced. And who is being forced? I suspect it’s not the narrator. Is it that by placing herself in this situation - or should I say intending to place herself in this situation - she is hoping to force the responses she relates in the piece?

]]> By: An Unreliable Witness http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-1878 An Unreliable Witness Thu, 31 Jul 2008 08:43:22 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-1878 Nice weather we're having. Nice weather we’re having.

]]> By: Your Wandering Mind http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-1876 Your Wandering Mind Wed, 30 Jul 2008 13:39:10 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-1876 Yes; very nice. Are you a romantic at heart? Yes; very nice. Are you a romantic at heart?

]]> By: lissa http://downinme.com/2008/07/30/forced-to-express-a-desire/comment-page-1/#comment-1875 lissa Wed, 30 Jul 2008 12:43:18 +0000 http://downinme.com/?p=258#comment-1875 beautiful. beautiful.

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